An Angel for Dupont

[clericdupont]

Hi all,

I am new here so I did not know if this is the right Point to post it. I am a huge Fan of Dupont and could see there is not many Things around about him in Terms of Fanficition and Poetry. Now I wonder if there is anything I cant write in my Story and/or Poetry about him? Anyone got any Suggestions or can I write whatever comes through my Mind.

All the best
Agnetha

[clericdupont]

Hi,
thanks for your quick Answer :-) Yes your right he is interesting in many Ways course you see through the Movie Hints of it that he feels indeed and I bet he does not take the Drug ;-) I mean when the cam showes the Moment when he lets his right Hand softly wander over his Desk. Oh and btw a nice Picture in your Signiture with the Boots, has inspired me further into my Story :-)

All the best
Agnetha

[clericjay]

Welcome at the best boards of the web. ;D

As Mira already said, just use your imagination. I myself wrote a story about Father, which is a character, who isn't described at all in the movie (and obviously not alive any more...).
But from my point of view it must be a very interesting character, because he installed the system of Libria and he must have reasons for doing this.
In my story "Memories of Father" I'm writing about Father's past even before he had the vision of Libria.
I'd be glad if you'd read it in the "Sense Offences"-section or if I were able to read your story there.

_{A "what if... Dupont would have survived the shot in his breast at the end..." story would be very interesting by the way...}

[clericdupont]

Thanks for your Answer, and by the Way: Ich bin auch deutsch :-) Would be interesting to hear what you think about Dupont on the view I would most likely to write of :-) And what if I would have stood between Preston and Dupont at the End to defent Dupont with my Life?

[clericjay]

You must be a true fan and loyal Librian if you'd have tried to rescue Council Dupont. ;D

If you want to tell me your idea, just send me a personal message (PM) and we'll talk about it in privat, because we don't have to spioler the public. ;D

It's good to have some German folks around here...
_{Und wir sind nicht die einzigen...}

[clericdupont]

I would do nearly everything for this Guy, he has something magical I guess. That is why I want to write this story, got all Pics of him I could find on this site ;-) I did send ya an PM btw.

[Aedh]

As Evil Genius In Residence, I offer a special welcome to you, clericdupont. For a fiction that deals with our favourite character, you might check out "House Of Cards." Also, "You're In The Army Now" has a twist involving him, though that's rather a lot to read all at once.

"It's not the message that is important, but our obedience to it." Best line in the movie.

[clericdupont]

Hi,
thanks for your Welcome :-) I could not find the first Story sadly. yes this Line is great, I observe his Actions in the Movie closely as it is said if you want to write about a Character then you should do some Researching, and that is what I do with it. Have seen this Movie now more often then the Month Feb has Days and I only saw it the first Time a few Month ago on BBC.

[BlackDragon]

Hey clericdupont welcome!
As my fellow clerics allready told you, feel free to write (or draw or something else about everything you want! Dupont is really a great character and not very explored so present us with your ideas!

[clericdupont]

At the Moment I am writing on my story but it will not be good that I am sure of. So in a few Days I think to be ready to present it to all of you here and I am looking forward to your Critics.

[clericdupont]

Hi all,
finaly I can present you with the first Bit of my Story. Critics of all Sort are welcome as only than I can get better.

An Angel for Dupont!

This Story begins in the Middle of a Dream and progresses from there. The Names and Characters mentioned in this Story are not mine and are Copyright by their Owners & Dimension Films. No Copyright breaches are intended. Only the Character “Cleric Wehner” belongs to me and is used in this Story to write my Thoughts about the Character “Dupont” & others mentioned. Critics are welcome of all Sorts.

- Chapter 1: The Dream –

They stood in the Middle of a huge Hall which made the Middle of a special Building. This Building stands in the Nethers, outside the great City of Libria. It can only be seen by the People who believe in the Rules of “Father” and obey them. This Building only has four Rooms and a Hallway leading to them. They are all Replicas of the original Rooms which are in the City of Libria: The City Furnaces, the Training hall for the Clerics, The dark Office & the White Office of Vice council Dupont.

Dupont had demanded of Cleric Wehner to lead him and Cleric Preston to this Building so that they could examan it and see what she does everytime she was off Shift. Now Dupont and Cleric Wehner where standing in the great Hall and looking around. The Doors to the Rooms where in Form of a huge T and let Light shine through which let the T´s unite in the Middle to form the Symbol of the City of Libria.

“What is behind those Doors Cleric?” Dupont asked with a Voice that Cleric Wehner found so demanding and erotic. “Please see for yourself Sir. Only 3 Persons are allowed to open these Doors: Me, you Sir & “Father”. “ The Vice council walked towards a Door and touched it. After it opend he saw the Replica of the City Furnaces. He continued to open the other 3 Doors and came back to the Middle. Impressed he said to her:” Cleric Wehner what is the Meaning of this all? I demand of you to tell me instantly! “

Cleric Wehner was now shivering all over her Body but tried to hide it as Feelings are punished by Death in the Fire. With shaking Voice she answered:” At midnight it will happen and you will see the Answer Sir.” A few Hours later the huge Doors began to shine out a lightblue Light and united in the Middle. Cleric Wehner and Vice council Dupont where lifted into the Air a bit. She slowely reached out with her left Hand and touched his Cheek softly and caring. He shivered for the first Time in Years, it was forbidden even for him to show Feelings. Then she spoke out her true Mind when she said to him in a soft Voice:” I love you Sir, I ever did and I will fight with my Life to safeguard yours.”

He came nearer to her and became overtaken by the erotic Atmosphare which the Light had created. He kissed her softly and than more demanding as if he would conquer her Piece by Piece. In this Moment of total Bliss for each other a Sword appeared in Front of them. It was a Katana, golden and the Handle was layed with Ornaments. “This is the golden Katana of “Father”. It only appears for the ones which truly love each other. It is made by “Father” and possesses all the Power needed to protect the Loved one from all Evil that might come to them,” she answered him as he looked a bit puzzled.

“So you will defend me from every Harm I might get Cleric Wehner?” he asked her & she nodded. The first Time in Years the overall Lord, Fathers Voice, was unsure of what to say. After a Wile he said:”We better keep that to our selfs and tell no one of what has happened here. Course even for me it is forbidden to show Feelings. But I cant let you go, you are a Dream come true for me, you can deliver me from Evil. Please don’t go my beautiful Cleric, please don’t leave me alone.”

[clericjay]

From my point of view this is a very unusual beginning, which makes the whole thing interesting for me.
I see a lot of fantasy roaming in your mind and waiting for its time to appear on paper/screen.

I'm awaiting to read, how the whole thing goes on.

[clericdupont]

Here is now the second Chapter of my Story, sorry that it took so long, as i was on Holiday. As always Reviews are always welcome, have fun reading:

An Angel for Dupont:
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Chapter 2: A Test And A Discovery


She suddenly woke up and realised it was all a dream again--this wonderful dream she kept getting nearly every night, since “Father's Voice” had spoken to forty second Class Clerics in the great Training Hall. She got up and had a look out of her window. Normally she should not be able to see through it, as a white sheet of paper normally blocked the view. But she had scraped off a bit of it and now saw Libria in the wonderful and colourful morning light, with the sun just beginning to rise over one of the Equilibrium Centers.

After a minute or two she remembered that today was the test which she and the other thirty-nine students had to take in order to become First Class Clerics. With a look at her watch she saw it was late, and if she did not hurry she would miss the beginning, and would have to wait another year for the next Test. After a few minutes of washing herself and dressing in her best clothing, she ran out of her flat towards the Training Hall. She arrived just in time, as “Father's Voice” was beginning to explain the Test and how it should be done.

“Greetings, students! Today you will be given the honour of taking the test which will elevate you to the stage of First Class Cleric, should you succeed. I will now explain the Test and I demand that you all listen carefully as I shall only explain it once. Here is what you required to do in Order to pass your Test.

"Each one of you will have to fight against a First Class Cleric for a certain time. After your time is over, you will both stop and your test will be done. I will then judge your action, and if I decide you have passed, I will arrange a meeting with each of you separately in my office in order to tell you the results of your test. But you will only get invited if you have passed. All others will be included in the training of Second Class Cleric again and have the chance again in the next year. That will be all; so now each one will be called forward by name and begin the fight, and the others will watch. I wish you a good outcome, for Father and the City of Libria.”

Cleric Wehner stood in the third of the four rows, and she could hear her heart beating faster with each of his words. To her, his speaking was each time like a symphony, which she should love to hear over and over again. She wished she could record each one of his speeches so that she could hear it before she went to bed each evening. But now she began watching each fight carefully, as it could give her valuable information about the persons' style of fighting and so she could judge her own style better against her opponent later. She only hoped it would not be the Cleric they all adored and feared so much; she hoped it would not be Cleric Preston whom she had to fight against--of course then it would be useless. She would not even stand for a minute against him.

Then her name was called, and everyone else watched with great curiosity as she was the only female this year. To speak the truth, there had not been a female Cleric who had the chance to come this far for over twenty years, and so this day was making history--but no one thought for a second that she could not pass if she would do it right and give it her best. She had to fight against a Cleric Marks: He was approximately 1.80 meters tall, slender in figure and had light blue eyes. His hair was brown and short and he seemed swift with the katana sword.

Then her fight began but in truth she fought for the one she loved: she fought for Vice Council Dupont, who she loved truthfully, and only him in the whole of Libria. She would give her life for him if it should come to that in the future, and she was always prepared for that moment. After about ten minutes of continuous fighting they both stopped and parted. All forty students had now finished their tests and now had to wait for the results.

After a bit of time an older man appeared in the Training Hall. He was the right hand of “Father's Voice” and was ordered to tell the results of the tests. He read from a paper that four students had passed the test successfully and that the other thirty-six should please go to assume the normal training again. The names of the successful students were then called out and they were taken to the 'dark office' of Vice Council Dupont. In front of it they were told to wait until called into it and ordered to take a seat.

After the last one in front of her came out her said to her in a whisper: "Be careful what you say to him when he asks you things--he does not seem to be in a good mood today.” She only nodded. Of course, what could he do to her what would be of a negative nature? Finally, she was called in and ordered to stand in front of his desk.

It was the first time she saw his so-called 'dark office,' and she was very impressed with what she saw. She looked around and sensed the presence of the security, which was not visible to the normal eye; she saw a statue of Atlas carrying the world on his shoulders. In front of her was his desk, made out of the best-looking wood she had ever seen, and a big chair behind it, which seemed to be made out of black wood. He had been sitting behind his desk, but now stood up to go around it and towards her.

Standing mere meters before her he began another symphony: "Congratulations, Cleric Wehner; as the only female Cleric in over twenty years, you passed the test and therefore you are now a Grammaton Cleric First Class. Your opponent was very impressed with your fighting skills and predicts a shining future for you if you continue this way of training. Now you will also be assigned to Cleric Marks as a 'partner in crime' against our great City and Father's Law, to fight all Sense Offenders.”

After finishing his speech he went around Cleric Wehner and saw a picture on her left wrist--it seemed to be a mark cut into her skin and depicted the letters V, C, D, which where all three entwined into each other. Behind these was the Symbol of the Tetragrammaton, the four T´s. He did not mention it to her but she noticed that he saw it. Without any further talking he released her to her quarters and went back to sit behind his desk.

As he was alone, he wandered towards the huge window in his 'dark office,' which was in the shape of a huge T, and watched the world go by. He thought of this tattoo Cleric Wehner had, and thought it perhaps to be his initials--but then again, nobody could possibly be so pure as to love him. He had done countless crimes in the name of Father's Law. He was the only one--or so he thought--who was feeling, and he had to hide it from everyone out there.

Could it be, after such a long time? Could it be that Cleric Wehner had trained and fought that hard to come all this way just for him? He knew it was wrong; if she were a Sense Offender with this tattoo, he should have brought her to the Court for justice. But he knew all too well what would happen: she would burn in the fires of Libria, a quick death in seconds. That was what he should have done, but somehow he could not bear the thought of losing her. Would it be allowed for 'Father's Voice' to feel the soft skin of a woman who seemed to have not only erotic feelings for him? Was he allowed to dream again and to begin a relationship with Cleric Wehner?

That and a lot more to come, in the next chapter of the saga !

[clericjay]

I like this chapter pretty well, especially the thoughts of Dupont are well done. I don't know why, but this chapter spreads some kind of warm, pleasant mood (but maybe it's just spring outside )
Go on like this. Let's see how you'll continue.

[Aedh]

Tension is building already! Perhaps you should write a screenplay and submit it to Luc Besson.

[clericdupont]

Here is the third Chapter of my Story. Critics and Spellchecks welcome as ever :-) Have fun reading:

An Angel for Dupont
Chapter 3: Observation & Evidence


After he finished his Thoughts he decided to send a Team to her Quarters in order to install some Cameras for Observation. He told the Team that he had Hints of Cleric Wehner being a Sense Offender and that he has to be sure and therefore Observation was needed. So the Team went to Cleric Wehners Quarters, as she was on Duty and out into the Nether with her Partner, to put out 6 Cams in different Rooms. After Dupont got the Signal that they were working he switched them on and let the Recorder do his Job. He was not yet interested, only when she would be Home for the Evening & Morning before she would go to work.
In the Nether Cleric Marks and Cleric Wehner had a Hint of 36 Sense Offenders hiding in large Building and they had to put them down and burn the Evidence. The Snipers were already inside as they arrived, doing there Job of cleaning. As both of them entered and Cleric Marks had heard what the Situation was, both set to their Task. For a Second he saw her Mark on her left Wrist and asked her:” What is this for Cleric Wehner?”
She nearly died at the Question, as she could not tell him why she bears the Mark of vice Council Dupont for ever on her Body. She could not tell him that she loved her Boss more than her own Life and would do everything he says even die for him if he would ask her to. So she remained silent and went on to do what she came here for: Murder innocent People in the Name of Father for the Crime (?) of Feeling. Or was it more in the Name of her Love? She does not know which was true but she did not care as HE ordered her to do it and therefore she did it.

Back from the Job Dupont ordered Cleric Marks into his “dark Office” to tell him what he had seen during the Job in the Nethers as he had told Cleric Marks to have a look out for any Signs which could point out that Cleric Wehner is a Sense Offender. Now he was there to report what he thought: “I have a few Hints that would make me think that Cleric Wehner is a Sense Offender, Sir. First off I saw a Mark on her left Wrist, which seemed to depict three Letters & the Symbol of the Tetra Grammaton. As I asked her what that is supposed to mean she did not answer me and went suddenly fast to her Task. But she nearly stopped dead in her Tracks as I asked her, so I think that the Symbols mean something very near and dear to her. I would recommend an investigation on this Sir. Apart from that there is no other Indication that Cleric Wehner does not obey Fathers Rules.”

Dupont thanked Cleric Marks for his Report and said he could go now. He then called in some Guards and ordered them to bring Cleric Wehner into the examination rooms, as he had to do an investigation and had to talk to her. The Guards did as ordered and about ten Minutes later Cleric Wehner was sitting in a simple and little Room with no Windows and only a Table and two Chairs. A While later her dark Angel entered the Room and said to her:” Cleric Wehner I know now for certain you are a Sense Offender. Normally there is only one Solution to resolve this Case: burn in the City Furnaces. But I have to do further investigation into it before I give you to the Court so that is why you are here now and not already in the Fires. If you cooperate your End will not be as painful as it is to the others, course they don’t get this Chance, they would have been shot on Site or incinerated without Trial. “He walked to stand behind her and she shivered as she felt his Breath on her Neck. `Oh please my Master , please do with me what you want I am yours for all Times’ she thought to herself and the waiting of what he might do now was driving her crazy.

As he began to speak he had his Mouth so near at her left Ear she could nearly feel his Lips brushing against it. With a commanding yet soft Voice he said to her:” Cleric Wehner you don’t stand a Chance. I will find out why you got this Mark, you will tell me it is only a Matter of Time. Let me tell you that I know Ways to make you talk, course I know that you are feeling. You feel everything and at every Time. I know that you fought hard to come to the Stage to make the Test and if I would not know it better I would even say you did it because of me. I would go so far to say that you feel for me, that you even might love me. But of course it can’t be course feeling is a Crime and you only have one Ruler to obey as we all do and that is Father.”

What will Dupont do to make Cleric Wehner talk? Will he find the Truth? What will happen next? All that and more in the next Chapter don’t miss it!

[Aedh]

Oooooh! Very dark and gothic! A nice, grim fight scene after the first paragraph would have gone down well too!

[clericdupont]

Greets all,

it took long but now back from Hollyday I came to write the next Chapter of the Story. I am sorry for Spellingmistakes. Have Fun reading and making Comments :-)

An Angel for Dupont
-Chapter 4: Love & Death –

! Warning: This Chapter may contain sexual Scenes as well as Character Death. If you are under 18 (in Europe) or under 21 (in the USA and other Country’s) reading this Chapter is at your own Risk. The Author can’t be held responsible for Damage caused as you have been warned by this Disclaimer!

For a Moment it was dead quiet in the Room and DuPont thought he could hear Breath began to flow faster and her Heart beating in a quicker pace. He went back to stand behind her and his left Hand reached for her Neck to caress it. S he touched her soft Skin he begin to shiver all over and moaned softly so that only he could hear it. Seconds after reaching he took it back again and told her to go. With a puzzled Look in her Face she went, trying to make Sense of what just happen. One Moment she thought she’d felt his Hand on her Neck and in the other he told her with the same normal Voice to go.

What the two did not know that they had been watched through the Camera in this Room, which was installed on the ceiling. On the other End Cleric Marks did see everything and came to the Conclusion that he had to dispose of Cleric Wehner or all would be lost. He never would have dared to do anything to his Boss as that was his Death sentence. So he began to think out a Plan how to get rid of her. The best would be when they are on Duty as no one would ever suspect a murder then.

Wilest waiting for his next Action to take place, Cleric Wehner was in the Trainings hall. But she was not there for real training; she was dressed in sensuous Silk which had the color of Blood. Also she brought her Katana with herself for a Dance of Danger and Erotic. Suddenly a Song was heard in the Hall, it was not loud but so that you could still hear it if you were to stand on the Balcony. It was the Song “Ella Elle l'A “from a Singer called Kate Ryan. She began her erotic Dance in combination with training with her Sword. She was so into it that she did not see DuPont standing on one of the Balcony’s, half in the Shadow. He watched her and got carried away in his Dreams again.

He thought what he would love to do with her, how he would caress her soft Skin, how he would take her away from all this without anyone seeing them two. His Quarters were big enough for it and he had seen to it that no one was to enter them except himself. In the last Days he had done some Changes to them: He had made a new Bed which was now double the Size of a normal one and with red Satin covers. The cupboards and the Wardrobes where now black Wood and the Carpet were made from Sort of Wool so that it was all smooth when his Angel would ever walk over it. Now he watched her ending her Dance and thought Time to leave as he did not want to be seen as of yet.

Cleric Wehner left the Hall unaware of the Visitor who had watched her and went back to her Quarters. She had to dress into the normal Suit in Order to begin her Shift. Back in the Main part of Libria where all the Clerics are she sat down at her Desk and began the normal Day at work. Not long after that Cleric Marks appeared and told her there was a raid in one of the Proziumfactorys and they had to bring it down short and hard. She only nodded and went with him to the Factory in Question. Shortly after briefing on the Scene Cleric Marks saw his Time had come to rid Libria of Cleric Wehner and to free his Boss. He let her go first under the saying that she had to start somewhere and that would be a great Moment to do so. She went on, very well knowing what he was up to and began her Job. Nearly finished she turned around and not a Moment too late as Cleric Marks had his Gun hold onto her and was ready to shoot her. But she was faster and shot him instead, and called the Snipers, she told them a Sense Offender shot her Partner. As they went back to Libria directly and left the dead Body of Cleric Marks behind with the others, they did not see that he was only wounded and creeped all the way out of the burning Danger before they burned the Place. He said silently that he will get Revenge when she would least expect it.

Back in Libria she went back to her Quarters as her Shift had just ended and began to prepare for a hot Bath and then going to Bed. But she did not even have Time to undress herself of that Suit as special Guards busted into her Rooms. She saw that it was the special Guards of her dark Angel and demanded to know what was going on here. One of them said:” Cleric Wehner your under Arrest and will come with us imminently!” Unable to disagree she went with them into a Van and was transported to another Part of the City. In front of a Building they stopped and she was roughly taken out of the Van and into the Building. On the third Floor the Guards knocked at a Door which looked just like hers and the others, so she was curios what all the commotion was about. She nearly lost it when she saw who opened: her black Angel.

He thanked his personal Guards and told them to assume there Places in his Offices again. As soon as they being alone he showed her around and told her that this was his Quarters. Cleric Wehner looked around and did not found this to be the Home of a Man who supposed to control a whole City and inflicts so much Harm and Death over People who don’t obey Fathers Laws. No that looked like the Home of a normal Man who was feeling and loveable. She was soon to find out how right she was and that she would soon be the only one allowed to feel but not to show it to others than him. She did not yet realize that all her Dreams she had where about to come true this Night in his Rooms, that he had the same Dreams since he saw her Mark on her Wrist.

Not yet finished her thinking she heard Footsteps from behind her and felt a Breath on her Neck which was already quicker than normal. DuPont was standing behind her in his normal dark blue Suit, dressed as he was at work. He folded her Hair out of the way of her Neck so it was free to see for him. He then started to caress her Neck softly with his left Hand and she could feel his Body pressing slowly at hers. He continued on her Neck now with soft Kisses and trailed them all the Way to her left Ear, nibbling at it. He softly whispered into her Ear:” I love you Cleric Wehner, I loved you since I saw that Mark on your Wrist. I dreamed of you every Second and I saw you dancing in the great Hall. You take my Breath away every Time I see you. You’re my Angel who can make me whole again and give me a new Life. I will give you everything you wish even my everything, my Life!” She shivered and turned around to face him. It was coming true, all her Dreams of touching the Skin of her Boss, and more. She only had to reach out her Hand to touch him and she was already in Heaven. She looked deeply into his Eyes which were nearly black with Lust already and saw his Dreams in there as well as he saw hers. Now he knew she did it all for him: The Letters of her Mark, the hard Training, the passing of the Test, it was all for him.

Cleric Wehner began to touch his soft Lips with hers and sucked a bit on his lower Lip. He moaned silently as she did so and let his Hands wander over her still clothed Body. She began to play with his Tongue in a sweet Duel and let him win as he let his wander over her upper Teeth. By now she had her Hands in his Hair, tugging at it lightly as to say ´yes please take me; I am all yours my black Angel´

She was burning inside, her Blood began to race and she could not wait any longer, she had to feel this hot Body of his. With this in Mind she showed him backwards till he fell softly onto his Bed. She kneeled over him, undid his Jacket and needy hang it over the nearby Chair. Then she undid his Tie & simply ripped off his Dress shirt to a perfect muscled upper Body. Softly and caring she let her Hands wander over it, only touching the fine Hairs on his Chest. He moaned louder murming:” Please give me more my Angel, I want you with everything you can give, I will be yours for ever, please take me!” With hearing that she knew his Blood must be racing and she bend down a bid to begin licking his right Nipple and then going to his left one. He let his Head fall back and enjoyed what she was doing to him. Helplessly lost in an Ocean of Pleasure he could not do anything else then moaning louder.

Next Chapter seeing the Conclusion of the Lovemaking and the Reappearance of an old Partner of Cleric Wehner. Be sure to read it when it’s out!

[Mirabilis]

Phew!!! Is it getting hot in here???

[Aedh]

Ooooo-errr!! YEAH baby! w00t!! ;D

[Aedh]

More please!!

[MistressOfLibria]

I heared you and sorry for the long Absence, I had a creative Blackout. But here is the next Part I hope it is ok still. Critics are welcomed as ever.

An Angel for Dupont

Chapter 5: Defense & Rebirce

Suddenly Cleric Wehner heard a Noise just in Front of the Door which leads to the Flat. She knew that Sound oh to well; it was the Sound of Death. Her Fears might come true, as she had back at her last Mission with Cleric Marks the Thought for a tiny Second that he was only wounded and not dead. If this would be the Truth he would now be back to get his Revenge on her. He now would try to shoot her as he always wanted. She had thought it for so long but she knew Cleric Marks could never do it as long as she was around People. She thought about why would he want to kill her and the only Thing entered her Mind was that he thought she had bewitched her Boss with a Beauty she never knew she had.

So she stopped and whispered into the right Ear of her Boss what she thought about what would be going on and he nearly not believed her. But both got dressed and the concluded that he would hide in the Shadow of his Quarters and helping her if needed. She would be there dressed in Silk and fight against Cleric Marks. Seconds after Dupont was safe in the Shadows, Cleric Marks entered to find her standing there beautiful and calm, armed with the usual Guns & Katanas. Cleric Marks nearly shivered by seeing Beauty and Danger in one Person and he could nearly understand why his Boss would fall for her.

“It is over for you Cleric Wehner. This Time you will not escape me. It is my Duty to rid Libria off you and only than we can be free again.” She still was calm but felt the Blood rising to boiling point the nearer Cleric Marks came, and she got ready for the Fight. She knew what might happen if she defended her Boss from such an Enemy: She would maybe recive the white Dress Suit. This Suit is never been given to anyone for Ages. If ever anyone wearing this kind of Suit it means he/she had defended Father and would be the highest Cleric of all. But she did not fight for the Suit, she fought for her Love, she fought for Vice Council Dupont, which she knew was Father, as Father himself died long ago.

But before she could finish her Thoughts, Cleric Marks had taken out his Katana and was set to fight. They began to fight and she said to him: “Be warned I have Powers you will never have. I have the Desire and the Power of Love!” Without any Words Cleric Marks continued the Fight. A few Minutes later he nearly had her on the Floor and Dupont in the Shadow nearly lost it. But with a Kick into an Area where it hurts Men most, Cleric Wehner got back up on her Feet and turned around so quick that Cleric Marks could not react. She spun around and cut his Throat with her Katana. He falls onto the Floor with lots of Blood coming out of his Body now.

Before he died he saw his Boss coming out of the Shadows and takes her in his Arms to kiss her. Then Dupont went towards Cleric Marks and said:” You where wrong Cleric Marks, I was never in any Danger. She loved me from the Start and I found it out through the Observations you did for me. The Mark on her Wrist shows my first Letters. She is soon to be my Wife and no one can change that.” After it was all over, Dupont called his special Guards and told them that Cleric Marks came to attack him in a Flash of Emotions and that Cleric Wehner defended him. The lifeless Body of Cleric Marks got carried away and burned in the Fire of the City Furnaces. After that incident it was clear that Cleric Wehner was due to recive the highest Honor a Cleric would get: the white Suit. She would be reborn into a new Identity and would then be only fighting to defend Dupont & Father and no one else.

[invisiblescientist]

Impressive happy ending (for Dupont, Cleric Wehner and the ruling Tetragrammaton elite who are exempt from taking Prozium, but not for most Librians!) So let the Librians work and obey, so that Dupont and Wehner can live happily thereafter.

But since you seem to be a fan of the Scottish actor Angus MacFadyen, let me emphasize that he has an important role in the movie Titus (1999). In this film, MacFadyen is one of the sons of General Titus Andronicus.
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[MistressOfLibria]

Thanks for the Complement :-) I was now thinking of making a few Minitales under the Titel " The Tales of the white Cleric". But if you think of another Title Suggestions are always welcome :-) It will be about the Things Cleric Wehner does in the white Suit in the Name of Father and/or for Dupont.

[invisiblescientist]

If you want to continue writing such creative stories about the White Cleric, let me make some suggestions.

For example, if you have not already seen Roman Polanski's version of Macbeth (1971), I strongly recommend this movie, because it is a very intense treatment of love mixed with greed for power, and how Lady MacBeth manipulates her husband to do terrible things to attain that power, how their crimes are getting out of control, etc...
www.rottentomatoes.com/m/1012952-macbeth/
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Macbeth_(1971_film)

Another great movie about the interaction between love and greed for power, would be Curse of the Golden Flower, which is a Chinese film, and covers similar themes like MacBeth.
www.rottentomatoes.com/m/curse_of_the_golden_flower/
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Curse_of_the_Golden_Flower

[MistressOfLibria]

I have now watched one of the Films you suggested, Titus, and I must say he nearly looks a deadly and erotic as Dupont does. But you might have got something wrong: I am not realy a Fan of the Actor but of the Character of Dupont. He looks erotic wilest he can be deadly and his Eyes are Angel & Devil in one Person. So does his Voice send Shivers through me when I watched him first in the Movie to which this Forum is dedicated, and after I have watched it so many Times that I lost Count, it still does.

But in the Movie Titus, something drawes me away from it: It is a mix of Futur & Past. And I dont realy like it. Either the Past of Rom (I am a great Fan of ancient Movies) or the Future. But both together dont mix in my Opinion. But it gave me a few Inspirations for my oncoming Storys so your Suggestion worked at last :-)

[invisiblescientist]

Oct 24, 2009 6:15:07 GMT -5 MistressOfLibria said:

I have now watched one of the Films you suggested, Titus, and I must say he nearly looks a deadly and erotic as Dupont does. But you might have got something wrong: I am not realy a Fan of the Actor but of the Character of Dupont. He looks erotic wilest he can be deadly and his Eyes are Angel & Devil in one Person. So does his Voice send Shivers through me when I watched him first in the Movie to which this Forum is dedicated, and after I have watched it so many Times that I lost Count, it still does.

But in the Movie Titus, something drawes me away from it: It is a mix of Futur & Past. And I dont realy like it. Either the Past of Rom (I am a great Fan of ancient Movies) or the Future. But both together dont mix in my Opinion. But it gave me a few Inspirations for my oncoming Storys so your Suggestion worked at last :-)

Thanks for clarifying that you are not a fan of the actor Angus Macfadyen, but only the Dupont character. But we can also say that the actor's qualities almost certainly contributed to the Dupont character. Perhaps another actor would have generated a totally different Dupont.

In any case, although the reason I mentioned the Titus movie was only because Angus Macfadyen had a role in this film, I am glad that you were able to find some inspiration for your new stories about the adventures of the White Cleric and Vice Council Dupont.

However, I was originally hoping that Roman Polanski's version of Macbeth (which is in its originally intended time period, not anachronistic like Titus) will be useful in your future stories. This version of Macbeth is extremely intense.

Since you said that you like films about ancient history or Rome, I wonder if you have seen Ben Hur:
www.rottentomatoes.com/m/benhur/
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ben-Hur_(1959_film)
This movie is 212 minutes long, and it is a very intense story about ancient Rome. Maybe this film might provide some ideas also.

[MistressOfLibria]

I agree with you that another Actor would have generated a totaly different Dupont. Althrough I have to admit that I did not liked him from Beginning. I I did fall for the Figur of Cleric Preston first. But in the Scenes of Dupont standing very near behind Preston and when he did let his hand softly wander over his Desk it came over me like a warm erotic May Rain. Since than I fall for Dupont.

Yes I know the Epic Drama of Ben Hur althrough I have not seen it so far but they just brought it on as a Musical in Germany. I have also been thinking of how to start my Storys and might soon be putting them into this Forum.

Stay tuned for more about it :-)

[invisiblescientist]

Oct 24, 2009 16:19:15 GMT -5 MistressOfLibria said:

I agree with you that another Actor would have generated a totaly different Dupont. Althrough I have to admit that I did not liked him from Beginning. I I did fall for the Figur of Cleric Preston first. But in the Scenes of Dupont standing very near behind Preston and when he did let his hand softly wander over his Desk it came over me like a warm erotic May Rain. Since than I fall for Dupont.

Let us review the qualities that can be attributed to Angus MacFadyen:

1) Self-confidence,
2) Resilience, robustness, endurance,
3) Authority, power.

As I was trying to explain, it seems that I ended up admiring the character of Mary O'Brian / Emily Watson as an incarnation of Joan of Arc (a character that strongly influenced me when I was a child.) Perhaps the childhood experiences and the personal archetypes that we all represent, have something to do with the movie characters (and the actors) we end up admiring.

Thus maybe in your case, the Dupont/MacFadyen character was exactly the kind of Jungian archetype that you find something in common with. Perhaps for this reson, despite all his faults and evil deeds, you are forced to forgive Dupont/MacFadyen, and you are forced to see only his good sides. Maybe this archetype of Dupont/MacFadyen, subconsciously corresponds to something for you.

[lian]

Hi Agnetha,

I just finished reading your story. It is an innovative plot with great potential. I can totally see this going in the MacBeth direction suggested by invisiblescientist. Even some of Lady MacBeth's passages from the original text are pretty intense. I just remember that line where she mentions killing her own baby as a metaphor to urge her hesitating husband to murder Duncan.

I think writing about Dupont is challenging. His position is based on manipulating and murdering other people for his own gain. And, unlike Preston, he is aware of (and feels!) his moral failure. It is not easy to bring out the complexity and human traits that readers can identify with and care about in such a character. So I commend you for taking on that challenge.

Here are some of the questions that came to my mind while reading the story. Maybe they give you ideas for themes to touch on in your "White Cleric" series or for an extension of the "Angel" storyline:

Why is Wehner in the Tetragrammaton if she is feeling? Since when is she feeling? How does she avoid being exposed?

Why does Wehner care about Dupont? At the start of the story, she has only seen him once in a very public situation and she already claims to love him. So is she more in love with the idea that she has of him than with the real person? What is it about him that attracts her and sets him apart in her eyes?

Dupont's instruction at the beginning of the test may need some minor clarification. Since only those who pass go to his office, why bother to tell them the results again? So maybe he should rather intend to "discuss" the results with them?

If Wehner has seen the "dark office" in her dream, why does she not recognize it when she goes there after her test?

What is Dupont's motivation? He is feeling, he is immediately attracted to Wehner and obviously has been craving some female attention in his lonely office all the time. So why bother to run a regime that is waging a war on emotions when love is what you really want?

What is the purpose of the test fight scene in the story? To expand on Wehner's character as a very skillful female cleric? To elaborate on Wehner's thoughts about Preston? To introduce the character of Marks? To bring Wehner into Dupont's office? I just noticed that the test fight itself is dealt with in only one sentence. So, why not elaborate?

Why, when and where did Wehner get this tattoo? If those are truly Dupont's initials, then she presumably got the tattoo only after her dreams and interest in Dupont started? So did she go to the Nethers or even the Underground to have it done? What made that tattoo so important to her that she would risk being exposed as a sense offender for it? Where has she first heard about tattoos? Did she see some EC-10 material that suggested that idea to her?

A small recommendation for the scene where Dupont lusts after Wehner on the training hall balcony: I feel the scene would be more believable and more powerful if Wehner just went through her normal training. That would still provide enough stimulus for Dupont's erotic-starved mind. Otherwise, it might be difficult to believably explain why sensuous silk dresses and Belgian pop songs are suddenly en vogue in the Grammaton Monastery and why they teach their clerics erotic dance.

How exactly does Wehner discover that Marks plans to kill her at the factory since she already knows it immediately after they arrive?

How does Wehner know that Dupont is Father and do all Librians know this?