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Post by JenGe on Dec 27, 2004 15:48:07 GMT -5
Whew!! FINALLY!!! Ashes Part 3 - RetributionAgain, I don't want to say too much until you guys have read it. Excellent as always Wolf....your style is unmatched but this one left me a bit sad... (oh, also let me know of errors!!)
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Post by Libby on Dec 27, 2004 17:26:09 GMT -5
OMG! Wonderfully done. Interestingly, it's a scenario that as a parent...and especially a mother... I simply could not have written. I could not have coped with the emotional fallout. I think that Father...never having understood the bond between parents and children...has made his fatal error. Far from weakening Preston this will probably result in THE most devastating backlash. I wouldn't like to be around when the cold dish of revenge gets served.
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Post by ClericWilkinson on Dec 27, 2004 19:14:14 GMT -5
*blink* Oh my gosh, ClericWolf! How could you kill Lisa and Robbie?! That's quite the turn...wow. I must say--the thought of that happening didn't even cross my mind. Very good job, though...I'm dying for more!
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Post by Witcher Wolf on Dec 27, 2004 21:33:04 GMT -5
If you were entertained and perhaps a little saddened then I succeded beyond my wildest expecations for part 3.
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Post by Sontin-JudasFm on Dec 28, 2004 7:12:01 GMT -5
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Post by TheMacroprosopus on Dec 28, 2004 11:19:10 GMT -5
Yeah...this right here is officially the sequel to Equilibrium. Well, I think it should be.
Or even a collaboration of all the stories written about what happens after the film...
Anyway, wonderfully written, Wolf. Absolutely excellent. I quite enjoy the ...Shakespearean (almost) way Ezekiel has of speaking.
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Post by ClericWilkinson on Dec 28, 2004 14:17:20 GMT -5
If you were entertained and perhaps a little saddened then I succeded beyond my wildest expecations for part 3. Indeed--entertained and more then a little saddened... *sniff* lol, I agree with you Judas--wouldn't want to be in their shoes when Preston catches up with 'em... That will not be a pretty sight. Excellently done, ClericWolf--I can't wait for more!
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Post by Libby on Dec 28, 2004 19:11:12 GMT -5
Mind you...ClericWolf is also a past master at playing with our emotions...so I would suggest we prepare ourselves for something even more devious!
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Post by Sasha on Dec 28, 2004 20:25:32 GMT -5
Cleric Wolf I'm almost speachless.....I love the emotional twists and turns, tearing me up over here! Can't wait for Ashes Part 4!!!
Sasha
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Post by Witcher Wolf on Dec 29, 2004 17:51:27 GMT -5
There are certain things I won't do however - as much as the evil twisted writer side of me wants to do them *G* Thanks Sasha btw I hope the best is yet to come *WEG*
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Post by mawa on Jan 1, 2005 14:58:56 GMT -5
The more I read this story, the better it gets. There are several things I love in "Retribution": - The characters - your original characters all really well-rounded and distinct. As for the EQ characters, you do stay true to them, which I admire. Leading a pre-made character is way harder than building an original from the very scratch and you did a great job with it.
- The tension - one surely can't get bored while reading "Retribution". I'm really curious how will the story evolve and I'm waiting for more.
- The ending - you always manage to write an ending, which isn't a standard one, hits me with a strong punch and makes me want more .
- The plot - it would be indeed a splendid sequel to EQ. It's well-thought and consistent. And the fact, that Preston loses his family was a huge blow - both for him and for the reader.
- The fact, that this story is so darn vivid For a long time I had a problem to find an appropriate adjective to characterize your manner of writing.
To put it short: excellent & powerful stuff.
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Post by Beefie on Jan 2, 2005 9:23:07 GMT -5
Wolf - you've done it again!!
Absolutely Fantasticly Powerful Stuff!!
Simply Ore Inspiring!!
Can't wait for the next part.
One of my favorite bits has to be when they are in Father's lair. I thought at one point you were heading for the kidnapping gag, but no, you steered us down another road.
“I will find a fetch the woman, if it’s required?” The black clad Cleric replied in an almost mechanical-logical fashion.
“No, that is too clichéd and the damsel in distress has been done to death.”
Loved it.
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Post by Witcher Wolf on Jan 3, 2005 9:04:24 GMT -5
*chuckles*
I've never yet resulted to the damsel in distress, and I get the feeling anyone that tried to kidnap that particular woman would find themselves staring down the barrel of a Cleric's pistol faster than they could say "Treading on my dreams."
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Post by Witcher Wolf on Jan 3, 2005 9:11:50 GMT -5
The more I read this story, the better it gets. There are several things I love in "Retribution": - The characters - your original characters all really well-rounded and distinct. As for the EQ characters, you do stay true to them, which I admire. Leading a pre-made character is way harder than building an original from the very scratch and you did a great job with it.
KW's EQ characters are very tricky to write, but also in keeping with the whole post-EQ feel of Ashes they must evolve, this is what I hope I am achieving with John. The original characters are fairly easy to keep in character, Tara is strong willed but not without her soft spots - don't be mistaken though that woman has a core of steel. [/li][li] The tension - one surely can't get bored while reading "Retribution". I'm really curious how will the story evolve and I'm waiting for more.[/quote] Wait and see [/li][li] The ending - you always manage to write an ending, which isn't a standard one, hits me with a strong punch and makes me want more .[/quote] I always find myself with a quandry of choices when it comes to the ending...usually the most twisted one wins. [/li][li] The plot - it would be indeed a splendid sequel to EQ. It's well-thought and consistent. And the fact, that Preston loses his family was a huge blow - both for him and for the reader.[/quote] I am both honoured and flattered that Stuponfucious and yourself think so, as well as a few others it seems - it gives me a big boost I must admit to read that. [/li][li] The fact, that this story is so darn vivid For a long time I had a problem to find an appropriate adjective to characterize your manner of writing. [/li][/ul][/quote] Vivid is what I try and shoot for every time. I try and describe things in just enough detail - not too much as to saturate the reader with images and ideas, but just enough to whet the appetite and hopefully take the reader on an interesting journey. - Thanks, that's what I was aiming for in the end.
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Post by Beefie on Jan 17, 2005 6:34:00 GMT -5
Ezekiel is a very methodical man and is probably far more in-touch with the whole 'mechanical logical' killer side of the Grammaton Cleric than many of the remnants of Father's old regime/guard. He is quite capable of the cold blooded murder of a small child that's playing out in the street, since to him Preston and Jurgen's coup that broke Libria out of its original state of mind is only a temporary setback. So that smalll child is already a sense offender, plain and simple and with a diseased tree you cut it down before the disease can spread - even if it is a sapling. If you remember Jason Issacs as Lucious Malfoy or as I recently saw him: Captain Hook...he's who I had in mind when EK first appeared for the look and whole menacing edge to his voice. Vocally he's got the slight twinge of a preacher but certainly keeps to the British side of villainy (hence the Lucious Malfoy influence). (ClericWolf. The above quote is from you from another thread but I thought I would post my response here as it is about Ashes Part 3.) That explains alot. While reading Ashes Retribution, and loosing myself into the character of Ezekiel. I had this image in my mind of how I portrayed him. The image that came back to me was Jason Issacs, or rather Lucious Malfoy. So I thought I would just let you know you succeeded with your interpretation. (Hope that makes sense, never was very good with words.)
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Post by Witcher Wolf on Jan 17, 2005 9:14:46 GMT -5
Thanks for that. It's always nice to know when you hit the mark and are able to translate what's in your head into someone elses
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