Post by -mark- on Nov 28, 2004 16:56:09 GMT -5
Ok, it's almost here after about two years int he making, and to think its just a short story sheesh!!! A new teaser is up witha new post below in this thread. The original teaser follows this sentence................
Ok so I have slowly begun work on my followup to my EQ fan fiction. This is very very much a work in progress and the narrative and some spelling is a little off but I will fix all in time. Anyways here is a little teaser for you and I hope to have it all finished in a month or two. just depends on school and the holidays and such.
And jen don't worry about posting anything yet to the net we can wait till I finish it all that way you can work on other things lol.
Oh and it will be somewhat a sequel to my last one so might wanna go read that one first hehe.....yeah shameless plug I know.
Anyways thanks for checking it out and without further ado.....
Uncompromised II: working title by Mark Neiser
”The Gun Katas.Through analysis of thousands of recorded gunfights, the Cleric has determined that the geometric distribution of antagonists in any gun battle is a statistically predictable element.
The Gun Kata treats the gun as a total weapon, each fluid position representing a maximum kill zone, inflicting maximum damage on the maximum number of opponents while keeping the defender clear of the statistically traditional trajectories of return fire.
By the rote mastery of this art, your firing efficiency will rise by no less than 120%. The different of a 63% increase to lethal proficiency makes the master of the Gun Katas an adversary not to be taken lightly”
“1….2…3…4…5…6…7…8…9…10” shouted the instructor.
“Excellent work Preston. Your moves are as precise as I have ever seen. Your mastery of the Gun Kata is without question better than anyone’s I have seen since……well myself to say the least”
“Well Commander Davidson it is well known that you are without question at the top of your class,” responded Preston.
“Well yes I admit I am good but you may be better. Why don’t we see who is better Preston?” asked Davidson.
“Sir?”
“I want you to duel me using live ammunition John.”
“But that is not allowed in the training Sir.”
“Yes in front of the other students you are correct, but this is your private lesson, no one will know but you and I.”
“And what if I was to kill you or you kill me?”
“A most horrible accident I assume,” Davidson says
:”I will not duel you sir.”
“Then you will die!”
And with this the Commander opened fire towards his student, as Preston moved quickly and proficiently out of the way of the bullets headed at him. Preston moved left, then right, then raised his guns and returned fire putting his teacher on the defense. His teacher was fast and as efficient as any Grammaton Cleric. Quite possibly the best there is in the Tetragrammaton.
Left, dodge, right, dodge, down, dodge. Each of them firing and moving quickly out of the way of the other’s bullets. Then Davidson began a roll left and Preston saw this as an opportunity. While firing and keeping his body away from the trajectory of bullets Preston moved forward, rolled quickly and came to his feet guns at the ready. When he rose he was at a face off with his Commander.
“Go ahead Preston shoot!”
“Sir this must end. It is against the rules of the Tetragrammaton.”
“I’m your commanding officer and I gave you an order.”
“I will not follow that order sir” Preston said as he lowered his guns, turned his back and walked away.
“You walk away from your Commander? I can have you reprimanded for that!”
Preston continued to walk away not saying anything. He could hear his Commander shouting as he walked out of the dojo thinking about what just had happened.
Three years later……
Six months ago Preston had to kill Commander Davidson,. He went awol and became a Sense Offender. His partner and mentor, Elrad Partridge, helped him with the take down. Since then things have been quite peaceful in Libria, but in the back of his mind Preston remembers the words Cleric Davidson told him about a resistance to the Father beginning.
……..to be continued………
Ok hope u like for now and much more later....
Ok so I have slowly begun work on my followup to my EQ fan fiction. This is very very much a work in progress and the narrative and some spelling is a little off but I will fix all in time. Anyways here is a little teaser for you and I hope to have it all finished in a month or two. just depends on school and the holidays and such.
And jen don't worry about posting anything yet to the net we can wait till I finish it all that way you can work on other things lol.
Oh and it will be somewhat a sequel to my last one so might wanna go read that one first hehe.....yeah shameless plug I know.
Anyways thanks for checking it out and without further ado.....
Uncompromised II: working title by Mark Neiser
”The Gun Katas.Through analysis of thousands of recorded gunfights, the Cleric has determined that the geometric distribution of antagonists in any gun battle is a statistically predictable element.
The Gun Kata treats the gun as a total weapon, each fluid position representing a maximum kill zone, inflicting maximum damage on the maximum number of opponents while keeping the defender clear of the statistically traditional trajectories of return fire.
By the rote mastery of this art, your firing efficiency will rise by no less than 120%. The different of a 63% increase to lethal proficiency makes the master of the Gun Katas an adversary not to be taken lightly”
“1….2…3…4…5…6…7…8…9…10” shouted the instructor.
“Excellent work Preston. Your moves are as precise as I have ever seen. Your mastery of the Gun Kata is without question better than anyone’s I have seen since……well myself to say the least”
“Well Commander Davidson it is well known that you are without question at the top of your class,” responded Preston.
“Well yes I admit I am good but you may be better. Why don’t we see who is better Preston?” asked Davidson.
“Sir?”
“I want you to duel me using live ammunition John.”
“But that is not allowed in the training Sir.”
“Yes in front of the other students you are correct, but this is your private lesson, no one will know but you and I.”
“And what if I was to kill you or you kill me?”
“A most horrible accident I assume,” Davidson says
:”I will not duel you sir.”
“Then you will die!”
And with this the Commander opened fire towards his student, as Preston moved quickly and proficiently out of the way of the bullets headed at him. Preston moved left, then right, then raised his guns and returned fire putting his teacher on the defense. His teacher was fast and as efficient as any Grammaton Cleric. Quite possibly the best there is in the Tetragrammaton.
Left, dodge, right, dodge, down, dodge. Each of them firing and moving quickly out of the way of the other’s bullets. Then Davidson began a roll left and Preston saw this as an opportunity. While firing and keeping his body away from the trajectory of bullets Preston moved forward, rolled quickly and came to his feet guns at the ready. When he rose he was at a face off with his Commander.
“Go ahead Preston shoot!”
“Sir this must end. It is against the rules of the Tetragrammaton.”
“I’m your commanding officer and I gave you an order.”
“I will not follow that order sir” Preston said as he lowered his guns, turned his back and walked away.
“You walk away from your Commander? I can have you reprimanded for that!”
Preston continued to walk away not saying anything. He could hear his Commander shouting as he walked out of the dojo thinking about what just had happened.
Three years later……
Six months ago Preston had to kill Commander Davidson,. He went awol and became a Sense Offender. His partner and mentor, Elrad Partridge, helped him with the take down. Since then things have been quite peaceful in Libria, but in the back of his mind Preston remembers the words Cleric Davidson told him about a resistance to the Father beginning.
……..to be continued………
Ok hope u like for now and much more later....
Besides, Coolhand's stuff, although it's one of the older fictions, it's truly awesome!
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