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Post by JenGe on Jul 30, 2004 10:56:02 GMT -5
It always is a thrill for me to add such awesome talent to the site. So here is the next one by ClericWolf... (clicky on picture or here...) |
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Post by Sontin-JudasFm on Jul 30, 2004 12:27:48 GMT -5
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Post by Witcher Wolf on Jul 30, 2004 12:53:41 GMT -5
Ashes is part 1 of the EQ fan fiction that I have been planning for a while now, so yes there will be more, expect about the same size in the next installment.
The fall of Libria is just the beginning.
*blushes at Jen's and Judas' words*
It's a true pleasure to contribute to such a fansite and to write for people who truly do appreciate it.
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Post by Father on Jul 30, 2004 16:42:35 GMT -5
I like it alot, the way you detail every aspect of the story by closelly describing the emotional awakening of this post-dictatorial Libria. Also the narative quality is excellent and keeps close to the way the movie was portrayed. The characters are faithfully rendered and match their proper personalitys as seen in Equilibrium.
The action is razor sharp and blend perfectly with the setting.
It opened my mind's theater, and that is what a good story should do... HIGH FIVE ClericWolf!
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Post by MisterAnderson on Jul 30, 2004 17:41:56 GMT -5
I have to concur with all of the above said statements. Da Wolf got skillz. Impressive stuff as always mate.  |
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Post by Witcher Wolf on Jul 30, 2004 17:55:24 GMT -5
Thanks Father, it was my pleasure and thanks Mr A  |
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Post by NateP on Jul 31, 2004 1:48:45 GMT -5
I agree with all above comments, and add this: you got maddd skillzz....  ;D I swear, I could see the two men standing there talking to each other, and then seeing John picking up and hugging his two kids like any doting father would. Then like in good movie fashion, I saw Ezekiel standing in the back just glaring at them, waiting and calculating........ The pictures from the movie you added were a nice bonus that also helped me to "see" the story unfold. I hope you will continue soon, and I'm really curious to see how Ezekiel and his friends will make everyones new lease on life hell. |
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Post by mawa on Jul 31, 2004 6:25:38 GMT -5
Terrific piece of work, Wolf! As Father said: you did a great job with those descriptions of Librians' emotional awakening. And it seems it will turn to a longer story ( a very long one, in fact ). ( It also seems that Ezekiel will be Preston's pain in the ass  ) I'll be waiting for the next part impatiently |
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Post by Witcher Wolf on Jul 31, 2004 7:21:21 GMT -5
Nate: Thanks for the comments but I can't take credit for the picture insertion, that would be the highly talented and lovely Webmaster Jen's forte. I simply provided the text. MaWa: There will be more, Ashes is but part of the story. |
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Post by Xenia Onatopp- Bale on Jul 31, 2004 10:23:39 GMT -5
Cleric Wolf, you're really a literary genius. Your works, including this one are fabulous. High five for you.
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Post by Libby on Aug 3, 2004 19:13:41 GMT -5
Once again I'm transported into another of ClericWolf's Worlds...only this time it's the phoenix of a new Libria...
I agree with all the comments posted so far. You have certainly captured the essence of 'what happens now?' and held true to Preston and Jurgen's nature.
I also have a feeling that Ezekiel might embody many of the 'dark' characteristics of your other major protagonists...Preston had better keep up the training!!!
Wonderful work as usual ClericWolf...a pleasure to read.
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Post by Witcher Wolf on Aug 3, 2004 19:21:44 GMT -5
Thankee, I'm just glad I was able to stay true to Kurt Wimmer's world, vision and characters |
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Post by NateP on Aug 4, 2004 17:47:33 GMT -5
When can we expect part two of this great story?
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Post by MisterAnderson on Aug 4, 2004 22:09:55 GMT -5
Hey, Ill bet the number on Ezekiels Grammaton Berretta's is 25:17
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The path of the righteous man is beset on all sides by the inequities of the selfish, and the tyranny of evil men. Blessed is he, who in the name of charity and goodwill, shepherds the weak through the valley of darkness for he is truly his brother's keeper and the finder of lost children. And I will strike down on thee with great vengence and furious anger, those who attempt to poison and destroy my brothers, and you will know my name is The Lord when I lay my vengence upon thee.
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Post by Witcher Wolf on Aug 5, 2004 7:05:16 GMT -5
Well spotted Mr Anderson, I'd award you a virtual coke for that -- if I could.
The next part will be done when I've worked out the next arc of the story, to my satisfaction.
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Post by TheMacroprosopus on Sept 16, 2004 10:00:28 GMT -5
Well, I finally read it. And I'm glad I did. This is more cinematic than frickin' movies. Odd as that sounds, I couldn't help but see everything playing in my head like a movie. Although, I got the image of Ezekiel and the Crow mixed up. I pictured him in the slightly hunched stance. I dunno.
The chaotic battles were awesome and brutal in my mind, with my little mental camera shaking to show the rumble of explosions and such.
Otherwise, I cannot wait for the next installment. Rock on.
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Post by Witcher Wolf on Sept 16, 2004 19:39:13 GMT -5
Thanks for taking the time to check it out Part 2 has been sent to Jen, she should put it up pretty soon - if you thought Part 1 was interesting, Part 2 should really grab you. |
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Post by JenGe on Sept 16, 2004 21:36:26 GMT -5
It'll take me a few more days to get to it. Most likely early next week.
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Post by Witcher Wolf on Sept 17, 2004 4:52:16 GMT -5
It'll take me a few more days to get to it. Most likely early next week. There is no rush I want you to savour it Jen *G* |
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Post by JenGe on Sept 21, 2004 15:52:05 GMT -5
Strap yourselves in...here's the continuing EQ ride ClericWolf style... Click on pix or here...Like I already told you AWESOME!! |
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Post by mawa on Sept 21, 2004 16:11:14 GMT -5
Yupee!!!  *jumps with excitement* Wolf: As soon as I read it I'll give you my feedback. |
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Post by TheMacroprosopus on Sept 21, 2004 17:24:13 GMT -5
I'll give you my feedback. I can already. Bloody wicked. Seriously. I like the way the "new" emotions are explained. And the (perhaps unconscious) reference to Star Trek. |
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Post by MisterAnderson on Sept 21, 2004 19:37:01 GMT -5
Love the new direction, Wolfenstein. Got a real "CSI/NYPD Blue" vibe from the murder story arc - great stuff! |
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Post by NateP on Sept 21, 2004 21:23:28 GMT -5
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Post by Sontin-JudasFm on Sept 22, 2004 6:10:38 GMT -5
*jaw dangles to floor* That was literally breathtaking! I loved the keen mix of suspense and humour throughout...and the end (won't spoil it)...didn't see that one coming! Brilliant stuff ;D;D;D Dare I hope there's more coming...? |
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Post by mawa on Sept 22, 2004 7:49:19 GMT -5
As I promise, here's my feedback: Wolf, that was terrific! Two thumbs up! You pictured the decaying post-Father world perfectly. As far as the first part was rather optimistic, now it goes way darker. I just kept asking myself... where is Kayne? I hope to see more of him. I'll be waiting for the next part. Keep them coming! |
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Post by Libby on Sept 22, 2004 8:47:44 GMT -5
Well... I've just had another of those OMG moments...
I have to admit I was fortunate to read this last week and was totally blown away...
I read through the whole thing again today and still am. We all have our thoughts on what 'New Libria' would be...but I think ClericWolf has captured the essence of the struggle facing those who are reborn into a different world , trying to come to terms with not only a new order, but new feelings...
As always, Wolf has shown us the darker side of our natures...and the consequences of the unrestrained psyche...
I am enthralled by the story layers... and Preston's maturation into a rounded, decent human being is beautifully portrayed...
Just wonderful....
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Post by Witcher Wolf on Sept 22, 2004 10:59:14 GMT -5
I won't say too much about the story at the moment since I'm positive there are a good few people who haven't read it.
The ending though came as a bit of a shock to me, when I thought of it.
Thanks for the wonderful comments though, and yes, there is a part 3 coming.
Ashes Part Three: The Consequences of Choice is the WIP title for the story, I think to be honest I am really really stoked with this look at Libria, it's not often I actually write in someone elses sandbox.
I can't really say exactly where the inspiration for the CIS/NYPD Blue concept came from, I think a lot of places, I have always been into the human psyche and the idea of repressed emotions, really ignited the fires so to speak.
I'm also hoping that the action (What there was of it) was as viscereal as some of Kurt's scenes and would sit well with the EQ crowd - I know if I can please the fans, I am on to a good start.
Ashes was a kind of build up to the post-Father world and Requiem was meant to detail the changes in the regime, some of them I thought were natural extensions of the way I see things heading in that society.
There's a lot of repression and when those valves are opened, there can be only one result an explosion.
John himself struck me as a wonderful and when given the chance, caring man who was painfully lost in this new realm, who needed a little guidance, that's where Tara came in - yeah, she just appeared out of nowhere, like magic.
Anyways, I am going to be working on part 3 - soon - though I might have to update OgaM and my Fantasy D&D Story first *G*
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;D I swear, I could see the two men standing there talking to each other, and then seeing John picking up and hugging his two kids like any doting father would. Then like in good movie fashion, I saw Ezekiel standing in the back just glaring at them, waiting and calculating........ The pictures from the movie you added were a nice bonus that also helped me to "see" the story unfold. I hope you will continue soon, and I'm really curious to see how Ezekiel and his friends will make everyones new lease on life hell. 
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