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Post by Libby on Jun 19, 2004 18:23:23 GMT -5
 Each time I watch EQ, I wonder about the old man..why he attacked Preston when he knew he stood no chance...what led him to this fate... My life before was hard enough;
I watched
my precious children slowly die as I
stood with my
empty hands outstretched; my belly
crying to be filled as they
cried to be held.
No man should outlive
his children: and so it was
I buried part
of me
with them.
Then war broke out and Hell broke loose;
I fought
alongside all my faithful friends until
they fell with
bloody hands outstretched; my beliefs
dying in my heart as they
died on the earth.
No one should leave this
life unmourned: and so it was
I buried more
of me
with them.
The Peace that came was falsely claimed;
I sought
out others who rejected Father's will
and grasped their
welcome hands outstretched; my feelings
showing in my eyes as they
showed theirs to me.
No one should live life
unfeeling: and so it was
I buried grief
and fought
with them.
The bullet in my back was no surprise;
I fell
into his arms and watched him feel my pain
and saw his
bloody hands outstretched; my demise
reflecting in his eyes as he
reflected on the truth.
No one should live life
unfeeling: and so it was
I buried part
of me
with him.
Libby |
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Post by Xenia Onatopp- Bale on Jun 20, 2004 7:44:14 GMT -5
Oh, a very beautiful, moving poem, Libby. Can you make more?
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Post by Libby on Jun 20, 2004 10:59:34 GMT -5
Thanks, Ona ;D I only write when something really moves me, when it just demands to be heard. This poem is quite highly structured, something I enjoy when the subject matter can handle it.
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Post by mawa on Jun 20, 2004 11:17:22 GMT -5
Wow, Libby! This baby deserves much, much more than a "great one"!  As you said, it's highly structured. Works great here. And what is maybe the most important thing - it's really thought provoking. Two thumbs up! |
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Post by Libby on Jun 20, 2004 11:58:13 GMT -5
*blushes* Thankyou, MaWa! ;D
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Post by MAX on Jun 21, 2004 5:51:57 GMT -5
Very nice Libby! And the picture really helps.  |
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Post by Witcher Wolf on Jun 21, 2004 7:15:43 GMT -5
Outstanding work as usual Libby, thought provoking and moving  |
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Post by Libby on Jun 21, 2004 7:44:42 GMT -5
*more blushes* Thanks, guys! ;D
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Post by Sontin-JudasFm on Jun 22, 2004 7:05:10 GMT -5
Absolutely brilliant...fingers crossed something else from EQ inspires you soon |
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Post by Libby on Jun 22, 2004 7:50:41 GMT -5
Thanks, Judas! ;D As a matter of fact...Jen's already got my next fanfic to put in Sense Offense when she gets back and settled!
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Post by MisterAnderson on Jun 22, 2004 18:17:42 GMT -5
Nice one Libby! Its always refreshing to see something done from a different perspective from time to time. Well done! |
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Post by Libby on Jun 30, 2004 8:58:09 GMT -5
Well, since everyone's getting creative atm, here's another little offering....
Sense Offender
Do I offend you?
How?
Because I want to praise the glory of the sunrise
And weep at the beauty of its setting?
Because my heart leaps at my loved one's approach
And beats passionately in time with his?
Are you offended?
How?
When your eyes register nothing but stark reality
And sunset is just another scientific fact.
When your heart is numbed by liquid amber
And beats merely to the ticking of a clock.
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Post by mawa on Jun 30, 2004 9:20:16 GMT -5
Do you offend me? No. ;D Nice stuff you have written here. I like the contrast between the first and the second stanza. And I love the "liquid amber" - short and accurate... WD, Libby! |
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Post by Libby on Jun 30, 2004 9:42:43 GMT -5
Thank you, MaWa! ;D Jen's going to have fun transferring all our(mine, yours and ClericWolf's) stuff into the Sense Offense bit!
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Post by Xenia Onatopp- Bale on Jun 30, 2004 12:02:15 GMT -5
Another great work, Libby. You're a class act.
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Post by Libby on Jun 30, 2004 12:20:30 GMT -5
*blushes* Thanks again, Ona. |
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Post by mawa on Jun 30, 2004 14:59:29 GMT -5
Thank you, MaWa! ;D Jen's going to have fun transferring all our(mine, yours and ClericWolf's) stuff into the Sense Offense bit! You're welcome! As for the transferring - there is quite a bit of this stuff indeed. I would say, that creativity is a very infectious state of mind - and it spreads out rapidly ;D ;D ;D ;D |
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Post by Libby on Jun 30, 2004 15:02:05 GMT -5
True...it's actually nice to bounce ideas off each other. |
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Post by mawa on Jun 30, 2004 15:08:50 GMT -5
Yup - pity, that I can't turn my ideas into a longer form ( read: a fanfiction ). As I'm a huge fan of your FF's, I'm incorporating some of your and Wolf's ideas into a computer game ( the project is currently suspended ). Still, I can't create any FF of mine.  |
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Post by Libby on Jun 30, 2004 16:25:53 GMT -5
That sounds exciting...but why is it suspended?
Y'know, I didn't think I could write anything longer than a postcard...until I tried. My first one here was decidedly rough around the edges, but once you actually get going and plan it all out, it does begin to flow and take on a life of its own. I got a lot of encouragement from Wolf, too, which helped.
I think the thing is to try...you never know what might happen. ;D
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Post by mawa on Jun 30, 2004 16:44:05 GMT -5
That sounds exciting...but why is it suspended? The reason is simple - I had tough exams ( criminal and civil law ) - I sat the latter one today and it took me quite a while to learn. Beside, I'm leaving abroad on Sunday and I'll be back on 25th of July. I'll resume my work as soon as I'll come back to Poland. As for the premise - see the following link: equilibrium.proboards17.com/index.cgi?board=EC10&thread=1083701441&action=display&start=15 - this is page 2 of the thread, see also page 3. Y'know, I didn't think I could write anything longer than a postcard...until I tried. My first one here was decidedly rough around the edges, but once you actually get going and plan it all out, it does begin to flow and take on a life of its own. I got a lot of encouragement from Wolf, too, which helped. The main barrier is the language. I speak & write English, that's true, but I still feel insecure in any kind of literary work ( as for those poems - they aren't long and they aren't sophisticated - in fact, they're quite simple - so they don't count ). I would have to ask either you or Wolf to take a look at it in order to get rid of any possible mistakes, which I try to avoid, but you know... When I'll start building a fanfic, be sure that I'll ask you for some beta-reading - if you don't mind, of course |
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Post by Libby on Jun 30, 2004 17:03:50 GMT -5
Thanks for the link. I have to admit I hadn't read all the 'EQ sequel' thread...although I've promised Judas a .vox file. Your ideas sound really interesting - and totally plausible. From what I understand from Judas, you have to do a lot of plot-mapping to get the game to run. That's a lot like plotting a story in chapters.
I don't think it matters whether you write a game or a fic...it's the creativity that matters. You have the ideas and the motivation, too. Judas learned as she went along, so I wouldn't worry.
As for your English, it's excellent...we Brits are shockers at learning another language to any level of fluency. (I speak a little French and even less German...although when I was at Uni I could converse happily in Latin and Anglo-Saxon!!!)
I'd be more than happy to beta any work you write ;D
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Post by mawa on Jun 30, 2004 17:09:24 GMT -5
Thanks for the offer - I'll keep it in mind As for my English - these boards keep it alive But I have to still make up for my German. I've learned it in high school, but I haven't used it for 2 years Any German EQ fanboards out there? One more question: Are you recording your voice for Judas' sequel?  |
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Post by Libby on Jun 30, 2004 17:34:00 GMT -5
Yes...when I find my mike and get organised enough. Summer Term finishes next week so I'm free (yay!) 'til September. I did a lot of full-time teaching this year so other stuff got shelved.
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Post by mawa on Jun 30, 2004 17:42:13 GMT -5
Yes...when I find my mike and get organised enough. Cool! I'm also involved!! I've got the role already, but I'll be able to start with recording after 25th of July. |
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Post by Xenia Onatopp- Bale on Jul 1, 2004 9:28:13 GMT -5
Are you going on vacation, MaWa? where?
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Post by mawa on Jul 1, 2004 15:48:54 GMT -5
Are you going on vacation, MaWa? where? Yes. I'm leaving with my best friend on Sunday and will spend 12 days in Switzerland as a volunteer. Later I'm going to France in order to visit my brother. |
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Post by Xenia Onatopp- Bale on Jul 2, 2004 8:33:13 GMT -5
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Post by mawa on Jul 2, 2004 11:23:29 GMT -5
Thank you, Ona.  |
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Post by Xenia Onatopp- Bale on Jul 3, 2004 8:30:27 GMT -5
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