The signs of Telepathy

[AlphonseCapone]

Hello. Its me again. Even though im quite a slacker on most boards here, meaning, I dont post muh. When indeed i DO post, I try to make it a big one. Great, 3 sentencec and already this can be considered spam, allright.

The signs of Telepathy is pretty much a story I have been having in my mind for some time now (evidence comming soon). The story is bout this person named James (inventive name). He is a normal person in a normal world (earth, year 2635). He has just finished his graduation in the UTA accademy (I like paragraphs UTA= United Terra Alliance). Where he is a MAW pilot (Its ineviatable MAW = Mechanoid Assault Warrior, or Mech).
So, so far so good. James is haunted by a dream, a dream that repeat itself, and have done since he turned 18, for no aparent reason. This dream you can read if you scroll down.

OK, short. James is a so called Telepath, but he dont know. The telepath of the world first appears 20.000 years ago because of radiation from a meteor strike. The first person to touch this meteor is a person named Ra, they know this in the year 2635 because thoe affected by the radiation has photographic memory. Most of the radiation slipped into Ra, and was brough over to his children and so on. Thus the Telepaths call themselves for The Children of Ra.
Ok, so far this story takes us nowhere but interesting stuff that you want to know more of. So I present to you, the enemy: Cult of Anubis. Thats right. The Children of Ra fight this enemy, and they still do in the year 2635. Since the telepaths have an obvius advantage I may say the advantage of the cult: Technology.
So, now we have a story: A hero, a setting, an enemy, and some mystery. The telepaths gaining their powers is an ok explanation, but why the Cult of Anubis are in war with the Children of Ra is a mystery, and how the Cult managed to get their advanced Technology is anotherone, both that will be answered in the final chapter (sad isnt it). BTW: Cult of Anubis ppl are from Atlantis . Annyways, this is the dream that James has, and also the beginning of my story:

Imagine. There is total silence, not a single sound, not the heartbeats in your ears, not even the blood stream you sometimes can hear if you listen very well. No breathing, although you are there, you are present, yet you do not feel alive. You are at a location which is unknown. To you. To anybody. This feeling of nothing sends a cold and unpleasant feeling down your neck which expands down your back and all the way down to the tip of your toes.
Feel...
You walk on something, something solid, it feels like metal. But when you try to bend down to touch whatever you are standing on all you touch is cold, liquid fluid. Perhaps water, perhaps something thicker. There is nothing around you, no light, no shadow, nothing. You try to speak, but no sound is made, only the bitter silence which follows your every move. You kick on the ground to make a sound, nothing. You try to clap, nothing. With absolutely no sense of where you are you start to walk. The ground now is solid, but every time you try to touch the ground, all you touch is the cold fluid. You stop. All your feelings seems abnormal, yet there is a sense of reality in the air, if indeed it is air.
Listen...
A small sound. Like a burning camp fire. Yet deep and therefore sends a shivering motion through whatever air there is, which again affects the odd ground and makes it shake. You listen more. Electricity. A mixture of the deep bass flame and an electric sound. So bright it makes every bone in your body shiver and sends yet another cold freezing feeling down your back. You try to speak in hope that sound made by you has returned to this odd place, still no sound is made. You look down to the ground, you can barely see yourself, see your feets, yet no ground, nothing. You look up.
See...
You can spot a light, far away. A small bluish light hovering slowly up and down with tiny rays of light spinning out from it. You start to calmly walk towards it, still no ground is visible. The light lights up only you, and nothing else. As you get closer you can see what you are wearing, strange clothes which you have no idea where, when and how you got. The light is near you, upon reach. You slowly move your left hand and reach for it. It does not move. You are able to touch it. Feel it as it lights up you hand. The light is warm. The first positive feeling you get, is warm, as life. The light is life itself. You close your hand around it, noticing yourself get darker. Only small lines of light comes out from the cracks between your fingers. The pupils in your eyes grow as they do not need to protect your eye from the light. You slowly open your hand again to take another glimpse of this odd light, only to notice it is gone. You have been given a chance to hold life itself, if not your life, the life of somebody else. But you were not able to keep it in your hand, keep it under control. Life has greater power than yourself.
Hope...
If not always, there is hope. In front of you, you can see another light appears. The same light. What do you do? How do you act? You walk away, walk away from life as it exists. And then, only then you are receivable to your reward. Everything you have ever dreamed of, too bad it still is... a dream.

And now for the part that everybody likes ^^
For some of you might know that I like to draw. Well... I have some drawings that I have drawn especially for this story. Here goes:

Drebnors gun: Drebnor is a character in my story. He is a very powerful telepath, and was believed to be the reincarnation of Ra: www.deviantart.com/view/2987605/

Mutant: Figures, my friend wanted to make an RPG out of my universe, thus we made up different races that Im now inprinting in my story... Mutants are one of them: www.deviantart.com/view/2990885/

Some weapon ideas: Just... weapon ideas : www.deviantart.com/view/4149465/

Drebnor: The person I was talking about. Is a bit out of proportion, but funny guy anyway: www.deviantart.com/view/3036972/

Car model: This is a model of the hoercars. The hover engines are in the "wings": www.deviantart.com/view/3003234/

Cult of Anubis Exoskeleton: The major war machines for the arch enemy of the Children of Ra: www.deviantart.com/view/3374406/

Cult of Anubis Exoskeleton version 2: Ops... did anotherone of those, this time I spent considerably more time on it: www.deviantart.com/view/4192037/

Want to know more... ask me... if you dont... shaddap!

[mawa]

Really nice premise for the story, AlphonseCapone!

And the drawings... Holy shit!!! To say they're awesome it's not enough!!

*MaWa stares speechless with jaw dropped*

[Libby]

Amazing artwork AC!
*Libby goes green with envy*

[MisterAnderson]

Incredible artwork A.C.!!!

I especially love the Exoskeleton ones & the Children of RA weapons....some insane detail there champ!

Good work!

[MAX]

Well done AlphonseCapone!
DAMN cool!

[EsbenF]

wow - virkelig flot tegnet!! That's really nice! Like the story as well, sounds like this one could be a classic. It's got a bit of that Dune atmosphere to it - Frank Herbert would be proud

[Xenia Onatopp- Bale]

You're really an artistic genius, AlphonseCapone

[AlphonseCapone]

My rather poethic beginning is just the beginning. All the other places there are just normal talk and such. And its quite an utopian mood overall. Since we live throught the eyes of James, one of the persons in the world lucky enough to have a nice life, this is ofcourse everything we get to know. The first chapter is very long, and very... boring. Nothing really serius happens there other than intruduction to various people. The second chapter happens several light years away from Earth. And is in a way the start of the story itself.

(Note: This is the unprocessed rough version, errors are in it, and some stuff has been changed. But this is the version I present, so that you can comment and criticize) (give my own comments in "()" after pharagraps)

CHAPTER 2: Far, far away
Darkness, black and cold. This very opposite of light, moving waves of radiation which makes the surrounding electrons swirl and become visible in form as particles, the source of truth, lays its foggy cover on the surface of the earth to create the everlasting cycle of night... and day. But Earth is far away. Earth is not even visible. Yet there is darkness. Sometimes a glimpse of a distant pulsating star, a dying star, sends its deadly light which can blow a hole in the thickest armor. This is a dark corridor of the galaxy, at the end of a galactic arm, with a black hole hid behind the massive burnt out stars. Hundreds of stars, once glorious sources of life giving rays, now just another victim, a meal, for a bottomless devouring hole. Yet the silence of light is broken. A tiny bluish light appears from a burnt out star's horizon. The light evades the dead sun and continues closer, approaching its destination. The bluish light makes the surface of the dead stars shine once again. The frozen gasses and unknown materials makes the light stronger. Like electrical clouds they move over the surface of the dead stars. Making them shine, not strong enough to be noticed from a distance, and not strong enough to give life. As the bluish light gets closer you can notice what it is. An Ion engine. It is a ship, a large ship. As the ship gets closer you can see windows. Indicates that there are something which can see on board, something living. The ship has a crew. A crew of 23 people. As the ship gets closer the engines at the back gets paler, and 2 engines at the front makes the massive ship slowly brake. The windows cast a blue light on the sides of the ship, it is hardly noticeable but on the sides there are writings. The letters "UTA" forms, and as the focus get clearer the name of the ship appears. "Medukon".
(Yes, the good ol "poetic" beginning. However this is less poetic and just more empty talk. Works as a way of describing the surrounding area)

 -"Captain, here are the first results of the sector scan". Mikkél said while handing over the crystal chard from the first sector scan over to Captain Steinar.
 -"Good work Mikkél, continue the scan and investigation". Steinar replied, turned around and continued to look at the hologram screen in font of him showing an infra red image of the surroundings. He took the crystal chard and plugged it into the computer. 
 -"Upload changes". Steinar said to the computer, and the computer started to work. A second later an image of the surroundings came up, unchanged. Mikkél stood still and watched the hologram for a while before he exited the cockpit. He walked in a hurry down the hallway to an elevator, this he took down to the bottom of the ship where the scanner room was. Mikkél entered the security code for the door, and the door opened. Inside chief of security Drebnor already sat in one of the 3 chairs in the room, looking at a hologram image from the last scan. Mikkél stood still in the door, as a large question mark. Drebnor took a quick peek at him and said;
 -"Nothing but burnt out stars in this sector. Seems like this weird black hole has gotten most of them". Mikkél looked suspiciously at Drebnor while he stood up from the chair, giving room for Mikkél. As Mikkél sat down he said with a voice of fear;
 -"I did not thing you knew anything about scanning Drebnor". Drebnor leaned over the chair still looking at the hologram.
 -"Sure I do Mikkél, Im a security officer, I know what im up to". Drebnor said with a smile in his face. A smile which could intimidate. Mikkél was already busy looking at the hologram image, and trying out different scanning methods. Infra red, nothing. Ultra violet, nothing. Gamma, nothing. Planetoidal tracking, something. Mikkél backed up from the hologram. Drebnor poked Mikkél on the back and said;
 -"You know... that little spot there is really not supposed to be there. For 2 reasons".
 -"I know... There is no sound in space, as that is what the planetoidal tracking is using, and the radiation from the black hole makes it impossible for anything to be that near without being destroyed by radiation from the black hole". Mikkél said.
Mikkél typed at the floating keyboard at a speed almost impossible to spot, numbers appeared on the screen, they seemed to have no sense at all, but as the time passed they formed coordinates. 
 -"There! Visual reconstruction of the item, enlarge!" Mikkél said enthusiastic while spinning his chair to get a vision of the center in the room. 
The hologram display in the center of the room lit up and formed a large 3D image of the surroundings outside the spaceship. Mikkél took the controls for the hologram and marked the little area the item was in. The hologram then zoomed in to the item so Mikkél and Drebnor could have a closer look. 
 -"Looks like a ghost", Drebnor said with a sarcastic look in his face.
 -"Perhaps it is, but I will rather call it a ship with bad cloaking abilities", Mikkél replied.
Mikkél ran over to the computer and made another crystal with information for the Captain. He took the disc and moved fast towards the door.
 -"Drebnor, you stay right here, I will be back after showing the Captain this". Mikkél said in the door.
 -"I will not move from this very spot", Drebnor said while pointing at the floor.
(A lot has been changed here. Why the hell do they use a crystal chard when the whole ship is connected to one computer is one example)

Drebnor... or Drebnor Sacacazzi is Earth born. Central Asia, where Russia once was, however both parents were from north Africa. He has an European look, many would say his tattoo in the face makes him look European. The tattoo is under his eye, it is a tattoo from the province of his parents and shows the eye of Ra. Ra was the ancient Egyptian sun god in about 4000 b.c. The eye of Ra symbolizes power. Which is a fact. Drebnor has power. To gain the grade security officer on a thin basis require power. Lucky for Drebnors parents they managed to get him where he wanted. 
Drebnor, as a man of law, has not always obeyed the law. Theft and wild hoovercar driving is among the light ones. Espionage is one of the heavy ones. But now Drebnor is a man of law... and have been the last 4 years since he became a crew member of the UTA border ship "Medukon". 
Drebnor is a special 22 year old man, his look he has kept since he was a little kid. Long, black hair, reaching almost all the way down to his belt. The hair is nicely cut and has 5 lines of artificially genetic coded white, 3 of them starting on his forehead and going over his head and down on the back. The other 2 are on the side of his ears. He also has a beard. The beard is nicely cut, and it is cut so it looks like a tattoo of some sort. And he prefers black clothing, with silver patterns and buttons. Although on board the Medukon he have to wear the blue security officer uniform, which he normally hides under his black robe under planetoidal missions. As a security officer, Drebnor is strong. He also have an ability to easily remember, and shows extraordinary leadership skills. His favorite weapon of choice is his own bought high voltage laser pistol. And of course the UTA-SR74, a sniper rifle. Drebnors voice is calm and rather emotionless. However it is highly persuasive. Combined with his special look that is.

As for Mikkél. Mikkél d'Enrique is Mars born. In the biggest city of Mars, Yogy, located near the north pole of Mars. Both his parents are also Mars born. Mikkél has a Japanese look, only with dark skin. He has a simple beard in his face, nicely cut. His long hair is forced back into a pigtail. The thick ring he uses to preserve his pigtail in one shape is of pure gold. Mikkél is a simple person, with a level 45 degree education in computers and radar technology. He has been at the "Medukon" for 2 years. Mikkél is the kind of person that stays in the back if there is a conflict, but if necessary he knows how to operate a gun, and an escape pod. Mikkéls voice is swift and a bit light, combined with his mood, which is constant happiness.
(Character profiles. Never easy. But Drebnor I have drawn... you can find a drawing of him in my first post. However recently I have come to perhaps change it)

Ok Thats enough right?... Its not entirelly the second chapter... almost half of it. But its a long read so ill save it... that is if you indeed want to know more (I sure hope I have created that effect). Im gonna put what I have written online soon... That way I can just link to it (the new version of this chapter))
And to not dissapoint you too much (after all this is a kind of thread renewal) I have drawn a random female Ghost from the computergame of StarCraft. Note that originally this was meanth to be a person in my story (UTA Assassin James falls in love with)... but you know... it didnt turn out that way. www.deviantart.com/view/6957410/
So... watcha think so far?